rate_review Reviews

(I review as I read.)
I’m really, REALLY sorry I haven’t reviewed this right away. I was on vacation and I hadn’t dared to log on to AFF while at my relatives’ house. I doubted they would approve. Many apologies and I’m going to continue reading this. Don’t lose faith if you don’t hear from me for a while. ^_~
Chapter 2: For the AN at the beginning: Thank you very much! It’s a little late, but Merry Christmas to you too! ^_^
Nice analogy(?) at the beginning about every book seeming to be thrown at her. . . . Each little detail of action, feeling, emotion, etc. has been done perfectly so far. . . . Hee hee, I like the bit about Shizune’s surprise at Tsunade’s voice and Tsunade’s irritation. . . . “A tight smile pulled at Tsunade’s lips, she knew what she was going to do with Naruto.” That sounds ominous. . . . Nice course of action, Tsunade. . . . A scroll, huh? Interesting. This mystery is pretty cool. I like all the unknowns (so long as they get answered eventually, it doesn’t have to be right away). . . . Hahaha, “Naruto was vaguely aware that he was alive, but it felt like Shukaku had leapt on his head a few times.” XDDD Question to the author: Are you British? . . . XDDD “He decided it was more like Shukaku and Kyuubi had been dancing over him.” HILARIOUS!! XDDD . . . Is Naruto all fuzzy-headed because he smacked his head on the railing? . . . Man, I love this mystery! . . . I like Kakashi’s and Tsunade’s reactions when they find the scroll. . . . Whoa, that’s ominous: “The Hokage diverted her gaze to Kakashi, and began to seal Naruto’s future.” It has a horrible ring of finality to it. . . . Oh my God, Naruto’s been unconscious for a few days? This gets more and more interesting. . . . Question: “People that saw him described [. . .] daze even If.” What’s that “If?”
Geez, this story is really intriguing! Keep that inspiration strong! ^_^

I have just read the story and i loved it i found it very intriguing,i have read the reviews for this story and i am confused as to why they are confused i dont understand what there is to be confused about i think the story made perfect sense.
To the last reviewer i dont understand what you mean with the writer getting motivated do you mean the pace of the story or the speed of the author writing it and posting it i personally like the pace of the story at the moment and i think the story is revealing itself nicely.

i would be happy if you got motivaded with the story

It's intriguing, but I'm a bit confused. Hopefully, the next few chapters will explain things out in better detail. :-) Can't wait to find out what happens next!

Ooh boy, now I'm excited. >_< Man, I hope Naruto comes out okay. I hope none of his closer friends are part of that mob--Shikamaru and Kiba and Neji and Lee and Sakura, etc.
"I found IT." ... mean. That was sad.
Oh, by the way, thanks for the note. Yay for happy endings! ^_^

now THIS is going to be an interesting read. can't say too much yet but please continue! i'm a little lost so will be curious to see how the plays out.

let the games continue!

very interesting. Can't wait to read more.
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wow, this is a really cool opening.

i can't wait until i see where you go with this. will naruto have any other outward changes to his physique? like how the whisker markings were his fox demon markings and how the racoon eyes are gaara's tanuki markings? i wonder what a wolf's markings would be, anyway? hehe only time will tell.

good luck with the story. i know this is your first attempt, but let me tell you, its got a fantastic opening. ^^ i look forward to what you do with this and how it develops.

Wow. That was pretty good. I like the bold-italic words used. And the description was vivid. Excellent. I'd love to see how this story unfolds. Good luck.
I notice that this story is tagged with "Angst"; that's the only thing that bothers me. But I'll try to keep reading this. I just hope it has a happy ending--I don't like sad ones. (Not that I'm begging, mind, it's just my own personal thought.)
By the way, whatever Beta you get--I'm ignorant, but--they probably won't have too much to do. The story was edited nicely. ^_~

very interesting. I'm a little confused about somethings but I guess they will be explained in futures chapters. Good start!
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