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for Death of the Sun

by Eloradanin

schedule September 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I want Hinata to wake up and realize that Naruto was framed. She tries to tell everyone what really happened but no one listens to her thinking she's brainwashed.

Hinata out of desperation will seeks out either the Missing Nin Sasuke or the Hidden Sand gang to save Naruto!!

All while Naruto still being tortured by the prisoners and guards.
schedule May 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Will you continue this story? Will they break Naruto? And if they find out the truth,
what will happen to Naruto? Will the Kyuubi be unleashed and takes revenge or will she/he run away with
his/her kit? And what about Hinata? Did she lie? Aren't they going to find out what has really happend?
Please update as soon as possible!!!

Ya
schedule May 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Please, please, please update!!!!!!!!! It's a very good story! And you write sooo amazing!!!
schedule January 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This is ok, but you might want to add the warning NC to your summary, since so far all sexual interation has been Non-Con in the most extreme. I find it icky and I gave this story a chance because I thought we'd get past it quickly since you didn't have the NC warning in the summary. Please fix it. It is an interesting story though.
person 1505627
schedule November 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
gaara makes more sense
schedule November 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Love where the story is going, kind of reminds me of that yaoi game: Enzai, and can't wait to read more (really hope Naruto finds the bastard who set him up).
person Mija
schedule November 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
ok forget Sasuke and or Gaara to come SAVE poor Naruto, let freakin Kyuubi come out and kill them ALL and then destroy the village for what they allowed to happen, but really I am still stumped here, Iruka let this happen without protest?? Tsunade? Kakashi? Sakura? I mean COME ON? I still cant believe Neji and Kiba and Shino believed but will the others?? can Shika be THAT stupid?? hes a genious he HAS to be thinking something is soooo wrong with all of this dont you think??? and again I have always voted for Sasuke to come help him, because one, no matter what kind of ass he is I still like him for Naru, but like others pointed out Gaara cant risk war with Suna and Konoha to save Naru, not if he is a good Kage and he is, no matter how much he would and I believe with all my heart he would be there in a FLASH the moment he finds out, but again screw them both and just let Naru beat the living snot out of everyone, escape and just LEAVE or take revenge upon those that did him wrong, of find the real bastard who raped Hinata, Oh I hope when they find out who really did it, Neji and the others who raped him kill them selves for what can never be forgiven, and if Naru forgives them, Im sooooooooo gonna pull my hair out lol, ok rant over, another wonderful chapter, been a long time but loving it anyhow, although it killed me to read how they hurt my poor Naru, sniffles, huggles and smiles Mija
schedule November 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
oh my word!! i would really like to know when hinata will wake up. this is so hard to read. this is so sad. poor naruto. i'll be sure to continue reading. can't wait for the day he is proven innocent.
schedule November 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh it's so depressing! I can't wait for his hero to come! I think it should be Gaara, just because he's the Kazekage, and I love him. I feel so bad for Naruto. I can't wait for Hinata to wake up. I can't wait to 1.) see Hinata's reactions when she wakes up and figures out what happened to Naruto. 2.) See what happens when they realize they broke an innocent boy, and 3.) Have his hero come along.

I can't wait for more of your story...Just one thing I had a problem with. The font goes so long that it's hard to read because you have to continuously scroll right and then left to read the whole thing.
The spacing is a little wonky. Otherwise it's all good.
Jades
schedule November 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Gah.. what the fuck is the ice and water supposed to do?? ç_ç
Eeewwww....

This story is mesmerizingly dark. Keep up the good work! (I'm waiting for the beautiful irony where Hinata comes out of her comma and reveals Naruto didn't rape her at all! Man, he'll be so fucked up by then. My god. Twisted. ^^)