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PLEASE GIVE ME MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ME WANT MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Please, it's an awesome story, but there's just one thing missing... GAARA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It's the only thing that could make this awesomely- super story into a divinely perfect story... so... anywho... it's your story so... PLEASE DON'T LEAVE ME HANGING!!!!!!!!!!

BTW: For some reason, I can never keep up with a story I bookmark... if you would be the awesome story writing author person lady that you are... when/if/when you update... could you email me and let me know? my email is dobeofthesand@gmail.com. THANKY!

You have to update! I've never been much for Yaoi, it just doesn't do it for me. But this story rocks my socks! :D

Are you going to continue writing this story i want to see how sasuke will act when he finds out the truth.

Love it ... XD this is such a hot fan fiction cant wait for your next chapter ... keep up the great writing... XD

hey,
i thought this story was awsome you have some real talent for writing this type of thing.
although i suppose i should start with the fact that i didn't stumble across this on my own my friend did who got into naruto from me but any way i'm shareing your story with some friends of mine later and i'm sure thell love it. :) by the way if your looking for a good site to get naruto chapters to read try this site (onemanga.com) its great for all kinds of stories to fall in love with.
also im dying to find out what happens next so please tell me if you can my e-mail is blade64_6@hotmail.com thx. :) also while reading your story (being a slight perfectionist i am) noticed a few spelling errors or plot mishaps that go with the real story,
although you'll fix or reveal why in later chapters im sure.
all in all though your story kept me reading down to the last detail.
thanx i loved it keep going.
your new fan. Belgarion363

ill be waiting for any up dates.

Qoute: never take life to seriously you'll never get out alive . by bugs bunny:)

HI

I want to say something to your rant... again?... oops

Well I just want to tell you to not lose your fun in writing and to try to take criticism positive. That sounds helpfull, doesn't it.. What I mean, there are many stories on the net and 90% are pure crap. Some you cannot even read more than a paragraph of, others are just bad.

The remaining 10 %, well some stories are readable, good, or interesting but there aren't many stories that are all 3. Those, I read and say: "I want more of that. Why didn't the author write more in this universe or at all." And only those few stories are worth my time to give criticism or if it's finished, my praise.

Criticism is meant as a praise even if the author probably doesn't feel this. I have to like the story to take my time and think about it and try to find out if it flows as smoothly as it could or if there is an opinion I can give that MAY help the author. But of course only the author can make the final decision it's his/her story after all and his/her great idea that started it all :D

Well that is my sentiment in giving criticism.

And even if nobody realizes this: this is meant as an encouragement and as a "PLEASE WRITE THE NEXT CHPATER SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooNNNNN!" KYAAAAA


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fuck em! do u 100%

This story isn't anything but brilliant. Take all this review with half an ear you can appreciate people that love your story, but in the end that is what it is, your story. There is no point in forcing the story to go a certain way when in your mind it doesn't want to go that way. Besides, if you change the story to suit what other people think then in the end you won't be as happy with it as you could have been. keep on doing your thing and in the end you'll be happy with what you've done

This latest chapter was funny enough and interesting I just had to leave a review. (Not that the others weren't, because they were generally awesome, well-written, had great characterisation and nice interactions etc, etc.)
Anyway, the part I'm particularly responding to is the last section with Sasuke. His reaction to Sai's art is absolutly priceless and I almost want to tell him that drawing naked people from life is how you're supposed to learn how to draw people with clothes on. But what Kakashi did was almost as good and seeing Sasuke's head spin after that was most enjoyable.

I actually quite like Kakashi's part in this story so far. Right now he contributes a bit of humourous sexing up, as well as bit of cute, clingy snuggles. (Better than the sexing up in my opinion.) Which is really all I could see on his part for a while, because even though he might open up emotionally in the end, I can't see him being very generous about sharing them anyway. So continue writing him as you please! I fully support this and your want for plot. (Because plot is possibly even yummier than clingy snuggles!)

You know, I don't like Sakura. I'm not sure I ever did. But I'll tell you what:

I wish I could have been her in chapter four. Holy Jiminy freaking Cricket!

Your Sasuke is dead center on the bullseye. I'm impressed. Him and Sai rolling around on the floor had me laughing my ass off. Sasuke must be in dire straits if he has reduced himself to this level of bitchery. Sore loser.

Nice work.