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I'm so sorry, I didn't see that you had responded to me. If you are still intrested my e-mail is : I.want.to.hurt.you.just.to.hear.you.screaming.my.name@hotmail.com
Thanks :) sorry again

Wow, your work astounds me lol. I don't have many chapter fics I actually keep tabs on, I'm more of a one-shot kind of girl, but your story has me hook, line, and sinker. The way you artfully yet tastefully describe the physical parts of your book and the amazing way you stick to character with only little deviance that fits the story really makes this an amazing work. Kudos to you and I'll be refreshing my favorites every day just to keep an eye on this one. Good luck on finding a beta!

Cool. Wonder if Neji could tell who's it was by the chakra? Who knows if his eyes can do that, though it would be kinda neat. If you're a grammar freak, then I'm a spelling fiend. Between us we've got half an editor. I've been itching to write a story for years but never felt like I had a good enough grasp of the characters to do so. Maybe we could work on something together? It might be mutually fulfilling. I really like what you're doing with this story and look forward to more.

Fast paced, exciting and well written. My heart aches for Naruto.

I have a few things i am ticked off with. Sakura doesnt even act like a virgin here in the first sex scene, and the cum strip thing? After the second time she would be begging them to stop, let alone be completely naked for the FIRST time infront of not one but TWO guys, she would be embarrassed as hell, more so then what you portray her. And I dont know about you but I didnt even look at my boyfriend from the waist down when we had sex, that was the shower afterward and I was incredibly embarrassed to even look down. It started interesting and then just turned into smut, I like a good story with my smut thanks, and this really wasnt that great. Check out the story "Like a tattoo" its a sai/sakura fic maybe you can get some idea's from that and improve on your story.

One more thing, your chapters are EXTREMELY short, omg if I were reading this and had to wait days for an update I would want the chapters to be three times longer then this. Also, NEVER stop in the middle of a sex scene, I dont care if its lime or not, most people just read these stories for the sex scenes, theres no reason to stop in the middle.

Good chapter. Will we find out who snagged Naruto before the final confrontation? You did make an error though. Gaara is from SUNA, not Iwa. Hope you fix that. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Very nice. I loved the emotion going on here. I hope they find Naruto soon. Can't wait to read more.
Rox

This story is really good. I look forward to the next chapter.

Keep Writing this, your a very good writer and i don't bother to say anything when i don't like the story or the way it's been writen.