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May 4, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Ok i blame you for this very very very interesting and deeply moving and amusing distraction from my homework. -mutters to self- i really should know by now not to open an aff.net link that is emailed when attempting homework. ... Any way... I thought that your story was brilliant and extremely well written like you knew of the emotions that would come of such a situation. I hope to read more of yours in the future.
Serpen
Serpen
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July 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That was a great story!!
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July 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
great story!
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July 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Really lovely. Bravo. I was starting to wonder after the second chapter if the story was going to have any conflict at all cuz it was just so fluffy and sweet but then when you mentioned mizuki...You really did a good job. The writing was solid and...well i love Kakairu so you pretty much couldn't do wrong in my eyes. Congrats, it's a great piece. Hope to read more of your work soon.
Cheers
Meg
Cheers
Meg
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July 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Good story, but sex with no lube? VIRGIN sex with no lube??? Blood from tearing acting as lube? Harsh....sexy (for a rape scene), but harsh. From the flow of the fic, i was expecting a WAFFy lemon. Yeah. It was good (in a painful to read sorta way) but next time please let them have some sorta oily, slick substance. PLeaSE!!
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July 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
LOVE IT!! My only complaint is in chapter 2, 'prostrate' should be 'prostate'. Prostates are way more enjoyable than prostrate;) Other than that, marvelous, darling! (though I do tend to agree with the above reviewer about the blood and spit. With as sweet and considerate as Kakashi is being with Iruka, doesn't seem like sex without lube--especially for Iruka's first time--would even be an option)
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July 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hello again. This fic of yours in going pretty nice, more since Mizuki is there now. Please continue writing more, and more now that you have a new character in your fic to make things even more interesting than they already were.
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July 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Just a note: blood is not, not, not a good lubricant; someone being considerate would be sure to have actual lube (much more effective than spit) on hand, and take it carefully. If somewhat callous is the characterization that you're going for, then what's there works, although it would still hurt.
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July 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Pretty nice
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July 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This was great.
I think it's amazing how you were able to make it so realistic and only in two chapters.
Usually it would take at least 4 to 5 chapters to develop enough of a plot for them to say 'I love you.' But you did it in only two chapters. And the sex scene wasn't 'perfect.' It was almost how it would actually be in real life, especially for his first time. It would be painful, and it's likely that there would be blood.
So I loved it. :D
I think it's amazing how you were able to make it so realistic and only in two chapters.
Usually it would take at least 4 to 5 chapters to develop enough of a plot for them to say 'I love you.' But you did it in only two chapters. And the sex scene wasn't 'perfect.' It was almost how it would actually be in real life, especially for his first time. It would be painful, and it's likely that there would be blood.
So I loved it. :D