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by LadyPiro

person ichigopudding
schedule February 5, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Aww so so cute xxx
schedule June 4, 2011 at 12:00 AM
i think this has got to be the hottest thing ive ever read i was drooling when i finished it my fiance was just looking at me like a freak and he shook his head he doesnt understand my love for yaoi but as long as he leaves me alone to read it thats ok lol
schedule October 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I really likeeded this one!!!!!!!!!! I give it ++++++++++ because it was funny and hot hoho yes thank you for posting!!!!!!!!!
schedule April 30, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Holy crap that was sexy! I was a bit skecthy at first, looking like a confused puppy... "Kakashi in this one?... The Sensei?!..." *shurgs indifferently* "Meh, I'm a hentai." Seriously, it was hot. Loved that Kakashi waiting or not expecting to join so quickly until told. Imagining Naruto with those faces you described beautifully made my heart jump almost literally. I have thing for sexually-possessive characters, so making Naruto an amateur when it comes to sex then possessing Sasuke so easily was a great trick. I smiled so wide.

My only complaints are your grammer (mostly the "to" when it's suppose to be "too") and there was a few times you repeated words in sentences. Also, you don't describe the sex posistions very well so I have to stop reading to try to fill in the blanks on imagining the posistions. Just some constructive criticism, I don't mean to offend.

But other than that, great job. You were pretty canon for the characters from what my b/f tells me of "Naruto"... DO NOT attack me for not seeing the series. B/f's trying to get season 6 b/c that's the only season he says I really need to see. I do hope you write more one-shot threesomes, though. This one really was very good.
person dustin
schedule April 19, 2009 at 12:00 AM
a-ma-zing! that may be the best kaka-naru-sasu story that i've read so far...you should make a sequel. and update if you do. if not...well, i'll live. thanx for the awesome read!
person cynaga
schedule January 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I've read this at least 5 times. What else can I say. Outstanding smexy characterizations and pron! Thx!
person Anon
schedule January 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Awesome! I loved it! This was so HOT. I'm DEFINITELY adding it to my favourites. Please write more soon! I loved it, loved it, loved it! You've got yourself a fan, LOL.
person eV
schedule January 19, 2009 at 12:00 AM
that was fucking awesome! lmao
person cynaga
schedule January 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Great stuff~!
schedule January 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
First rate pr0ns, man. So many witty lines A.) I’m a hot, experienced, older man B.) I’m kinky C.) I have proof of my sexual expertise<\i> and so hot.