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for Peace, Like There Never Was

by MPlantz

person midnightscar17
schedule January 10, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Update please i want some narusaku
schedule January 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
You need quotation marks, man. It's hard to understand your story, because the dialogue isn't seperated from the narrative. This has potential, but you need to put quotations around the dialogue. I hope to see more stories from you in the future.