rate_review Reviews

humm, a nice short story.

there were a few parts where it felt like you just wanted to end the scene without going into details, its very noticeable and should be avoided.

that said, the story idea is an interesting one, but i think it needs some refinement, like instead of it being a "love spell" or something, perhaps the power of cohesion/suggestion as it could be used more practically.

but thats just my thoughts.

"I didn’t tell you because I didn’t think about it."

Best excuse ever in a fanfiction

Been done before but its nice to see this style of Naruto story. There doesn't seem to be much difference between the fast and slow ways of seduction though. The slow way is still incredibly fast considering getting that loyal of a relationship takes year.

great job the lemons could be longer but sometimes there is something to say for nice short ones.

sorry to hear about the tumor. i know a bit about how those are since my grandpa had 3 of them and they were only able to remove 2 of them. its great though that you are able to continue on after good luck and keep fighting :)

Very nice lemon, though it could've been a bit longer and maybe with more description of how it felt (for both parties). I loved the ending, that was hilarious! Was Kurenai's appearance a hint of who will be next? Can't wait for the next one! Keep up the awesome work and please update as soon as you can!

fascinating. lots of potential. i say for some of the first girls he gets in his harem are Ayame, Hinata, Sakura, Ino, Anko in that order.(my favorite though is hinata but naruto is to oblivious to notice her unless someone points her out(like say ayame notices her and mentions something to naruto)

Haha, funny opening. Looks like a great start to me. Can't wait to see how this will turn out. I hope your beta finishes soon!