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by PhoenixInnocence

person redfox9t
schedule May 24, 2013 at 12:00 AM
updateeee pleaseee!!!!
person Angel
schedule May 2, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I hate Sakura. And I really hope she hasn't completely ruined Sasuke and Naruto's relationship. Keep up the good work and update soon! :D
schedule April 30, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Another wonderful chapter, thank you sooooo much for the update. First off, forget having one of the other characters knock Sakura on her ass. Write me in as a character, I'll give her a beat down that will have the school talking for generations. -_-
I love the way you have exposed Sakura's evil genius for us all to see, she is a woman who knows what she wants and does everything in her power to get it. It's just too bad she is so willing to destroy something special to reach her goal. I know a few people like that in real life.
I feel bad for Naruto, he wants to be a good person, and is someone who gives all he has to those he cares about. However, in a way he got exactly what was coming to him. He knew Sakura was ruthless in her desires, he witnessed that first hand when she chased after Sasuke all their life, so her behavior shouldn't come as such a surprise to him when she switched her focus to him.
And Sasuke, can we say trust issues? Seriously what was he thinking? When he realized Sakura was the one that sent the text and set the whole thing up he should have slapped that bitch so hard she saw stars, but no he over-reacted and turned on the one person who loves him most. I know you can only give someone so many chances to change but he should think before he reacts.
I truly hope the both of them can come through this storm together and find a deeper love that CAN stand the test of time. -sigh- I sound like a hopeless romantic, but what can I say? I always root for true love. :)
Good job, I can't wait for your next post.
person G
schedule April 27, 2013 at 12:00 AM
The problem with Naruto's behavior around Sakura is that it should be EASY to reject her. He's GAY. And yet he can't find the backbone to put her in her place. A simple, "I'm not interested and your behavior is making me uncomfortable" is usually enough to chase most people off. Sakura isn't most people, but Naruto hasn't even done the minimum (directly confronting her about her behavior) to get her to stop. He just runs away and avoids confronting her whenever she's making him uncomfortable. Come on now, he's no baby. He needs to man up and handle his business instead of avoiding the issue or waiting for Sasuke to take care of it for him.

Here's a scenario: supposing the one after Naruto were another hot guy with a charming personality, someone who would be legitimate competition for Sasuke.

Sure, Sasuke is stupid for doing exactly what Sakura wants, especially when he knows there's no way Naruto could return her feelings (even though she did do a good job planting doubts in his head), but supposing the above scenario were to take place (and it's very possible that in the future it would, especially since Naruto is cute), what's Sasuke supposed to do then? He's supposed to be able to TRUST that Naruto could handle his business without Sasuke constantly needing to watch over him so he doesn't get himself into trouble with other people.

Naruto isn't stupid (much) and he's not a princess, so why should Sasuke need to intervene on Naruto's behalf with a forceful suitor? Does Naruto ever intervene with Sasuke's fangirls (and fanboys)? With all the people who want Sasuke, you'd think Naruto would also be stressed out about the competition, but he's not. So Sasuke deserves to feel the same kind of security in their relationship that Naruto does. It's not much to ask for.
person kkt
schedule April 26, 2013 at 12:00 AM
uh-oh! Naruto better not take Sasuke back too easily. The boy's gotta learn there are no take backs when it comes to breaking up
person Kyoko21
schedule April 25, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Ano... Ano.... Can u like make Kushina help fix the relationship between sasu n naru. Maybe she give advise to Naru like... What if U put sasuke in your shoe, u saw him been kissed by another girl and he didn't pushed her away, how would you feel?.... And then naru would realize his mistake and try to fix it... Kushina invite sasu to dinner n that's when naru try to fix it and being stubborn not to break. And somehow Minato find out the relationship and was about to oppose but stopped by Kushina and been talked into reasons.... Meanwhile itachi and shikamaru found out about sakura's scheme and torture her, in secret.... Hehehe.... That's my version of next chapter but if it's different then what u want then it's ok if u don't want to make it like what i imagine. I would love to read your story anyway.
person clover
schedule April 25, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I seriously cried on that last part. Either Naruto's too nice that he doesn't just push Sakura away -- literally and figuratively -- or he's too dumb and oblivious that he doesn't get what Sakura's trying to do. I know it's cruel, but I would've done the same thing Sasuke did. Naruto needs something to shake him up and that break up may just do the job. I hope. Maybe if he sees Sasuke hanging out with someone new, he'll grow a back bone and bitch slap Sakura.

I am enjoying the story. Please keep it coming. I hope you update soon.


person Athrun434
schedule April 25, 2013 at 12:00 AM
thanks for the wonderful chapter. when I got to the part about to ring I thought it was very lovey dovey but then the ending poor naruto fantastic cliff hanger.
person Talltree-san
schedule April 24, 2013 at 12:00 AM
PHOOEY I don't like drama... and yet I still crave it all the same ( what's wrong with me XD )! But what's a story without some pink-haired menace trying to mosey on in your beau :) . And what the heck is Sasuke doing?! He knows what's going on but then he does that crap DX ! But I guess I kinda see where Sasuke is coming from, Naruto should have known just a little better about being alone with Sakura and putting his guard down. Though alas Naruto is just too trusting for his own good :( .
person Ladydeath2013
schedule April 24, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I really wanna hit Sakura and Sasuke. Poor Naruto. I cant wait till the next chapter